More Mock-ups...

Once again blogger has decided to play with the colours on my pictures, but I guess you get the gist of them.
The image on the left is the mock-up I took to PAL for the crit, where I received some positive and constructive feedback;

• Exchange 'the' for 'a' as the is too excluding.

• Find a way to highlight the word 'rape' as it's the strongest word on the page. possibly do it the same way as 'adultery'.

• Lose the capital letters on the tag line.

I then went on to create the image on the right, having made those changes. I feel that this piece will be very effective once I have a set of photographs to use for it.